When I was alone, I felt loneliness.
But now I feel happiness.
You were the one who saved me from the dark.
And made also my life feel happiness
The world looks so beautiful.
It is filled with joy. Can you feel happiness?
Like the flowers bloom in May, you are my flower.
The one that is sensitive, and lovely, that need to feel happiness.
My heart started bounce after meeting you.
And now it’s broken, it can only feel happiness
Is the poem written as separate sets of couplets?
ReplyDeleteyes.
Are each of the couplets a complete thought (sentence)?
no, it has a two different sentence.
Is each couplet a separate idea, image, etc.?
yes, it does have a separate idea.
What is the rhyme scheme? Does it fit the definition of a Ghazal?
AB, CB, DB, EB, FB Yes. except the one sentence for a couplet.
What is the refrain? Is it repeated in each couplet?
Does each couplet share the same rhythm (number of syllables)?
No, it has different number of syllables.
What is good about this poem?
The way the author shows her feelings. Her happiness.
What could the author do to improve the poem? Be specific.
Think of another sentence that really fits for the word happiness in the poem. Its kind of not really connected to what you are trying to say,
Using the rubric I gave you at the beginning of the unit, what grade would you give this poem? Why? Be specific.
4. Good wordings. Just a little improvement..